My body was trembling in fear as I looked down, seeing how high up in the sky I was. I was rather nervous, but then I swallowed my fear and tried to calm myself with some slow, nice and steady breathing. I then gripped onto the straps of my parachute and then leaped off of the plane. I screamed so loudly I wasn't able to hear myself, I felt the pressure of the wind hitting my body. I shut my eyes tight, afraid to even look down. I then slowly opened my eyes, tears coming out of the corners of my eyes from the air pressure and I was able to see the beautiful scenery. I then pulled on the string roughly to be able to trigger the parachute, making myself sway in the sky. I was just taking in the lovely view.All of the fear inside of me just washed away, filling up with amazement and amusement. It was rather scary at first, but seeing the amazing view and be able to be more confident, it was worth it. I was so lucky I was safe and sound and not squished to the ground like a fruit. Curse me and my overthinking brain!!
Kia Ora Lola,
ReplyDeleteI love when you said your screaming so loud that you cloudn't hear yourself.
Did you know that I almost used that same oxymoron.
Maybe next time you could add a bit more of a dramatic twist or describe getting on the plane at the start.
Was there going to be a different ending to your story?
Kind Regards Leandri.
Hi Lola my name is Lola from Ahipara school, I really like your writing its very descriptive and interesting, keep up the great work!
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Hi Lola Its Eva from Ahipara school.
ReplyDeleteI really liked the animation you put with the writing.
Maybe next time you could try to use words like then & and less and replace them with something better.
Why did you guys have to write about sky diving?
Hi Lola,
ReplyDeleteI loved your skydiving story! It was very descriptive
and I like it! I love the gifs you have put in as well!
Maybe next time you could write a blurb
about why you had to write a skydiving story.
How would you feel if you went skydiving?
I would feel terrified.
Overall I really enjoyed your blog post.
I hope you have a good day! Bye!
-Tiare.